People need to be able to receive constructive feedback and improve, without feeling attacked.
I did not detect snark, or superiority in this feedback comment. Instead, it seems to genuinely attempt to offer constructive feedback.
The parent pointed out a specific fragment that needs re-work, which is an actionable item for the OP. Perhaps it could have been framed more positively, but constructing a place where people cannot offer direct, actionable feedback is quite unhelpful for all involved.
I'm mostly on your side, although the specific phrase "I want to read your work but..." [your opening sentence isn't good enough for me to grace your article with my superior writer eyeballs?] is perhaps problematic.
Otherwise, I agree that it appears helpful and applicable.
People need to be able to receive constructive feedback and improve, without feeling attacked.
I did not detect snark, or superiority in this feedback comment. Instead, it seems to genuinely attempt to offer constructive feedback.
The parent pointed out a specific fragment that needs re-work, which is an actionable item for the OP. Perhaps it could have been framed more positively, but constructing a place where people cannot offer direct, actionable feedback is quite unhelpful for all involved.